河南省新密一高高三英語《作文講評》課件
北京卷寫作批改記錄 你的寫作都有什么問題？ 1 卷面太差，書寫不認真 （要想得20分以上沒有好的卷面不可能） 2 審題不認真，（原文圖畫上是正在上課時 一位老師摔倒了，而有些學生看成一位同學生病了） 3 寫作風格不對，英語寫作要求開門見山 直奔主題禁忌穿鞋帶帽 4 篇幅太短，只有框架，沒有內容 5 文章不分段，或亂分段 6無時態概念，亂用時態 寫作中的具體錯誤 1 單詞拼寫錯誤；診所
腳踝，聊天 講臺
2 動詞的過去式過去分詞如 ring,stand,teach, 3 語法錯誤： 1 Thanks to our monitor is calm,
2 while we were focus on
3 Our English teacher need have a good rest
4 She was love us very much
5 I am feeling very happy and sweet
6 Because had a first aid ,she came back
7 We swiftly realized what had happened
8 Our English teacher returned with a wheelchair
9 We hope our English teacher would have a fully recovery 怎樣提高你的寫作水平呢? 1 要有高分意識 2 平時要有意識積累好的 單詞，短語，句子 3 要多動手，不要眼高手低 4
要善于仿寫不同類型的作文 5 背范文，從范文中汲取精華 6 多背地道的英語句子，避免漢語式英語 北京卷范文賞析
Last Monday, we were having our Chinese class
when the teacher suddenly slipped and fell. We were
all worried about her .One ofthe boys carried her on
theback,with the help of some others ,to the clicnic
immmediately.It turned out that her right leg was
broken and she had to stay in the hospital.The
followingday,we went to visit her with flowers and
fruit.Seeing her lying in bed with her leg wrapped in
bandages, we felt sorry for her and hoped that
she would recover soon.This Friday, she returned to
the class on a wheelchair to give us lessons.We were
all deeply moved
and proud of having such a
responsible teacher.
北京卷寫作批改記錄 你的寫作都有什么問題？ 1 卷面太差，書寫不認真 （要想得20分以上沒有好的卷面不可能） 2 審題不認真，（原文圖畫上是正在上課時 一位老師摔倒了，而有些學生看成一位同學生病了） 3 寫作風格不對，英語寫作要求開門見山 直奔主題禁忌穿鞋帶帽 4 篇幅太短，只有框架，沒有內容 5 文章不分段，或亂分段 6無時態概念，亂用時態 寫作中的具體錯誤 1 單詞拼寫錯誤；診所
腳踝，聊天 講臺
2 動詞的過去式過去分詞如 ring,stand,teach, 3 語法錯誤： 1 Thanks to our monitor is calm,
2 while we were focus on
3 Our English teacher need have a good rest
4 She was love us very much
5 I am feeling very happy and sweet
6 Because had a first aid ,she came back
7 We swiftly realized what had happened
8 Our English teacher returned with a wheelchair
9 We hope our English teacher would have a fully recovery 怎樣提高你的寫作水平呢? 1 要有高分意識 2 平時要有意識積累好的 單詞，短語，句子 3 要多動手，不要眼高手低 4
要善于仿寫不同類型的作文 5 背范文，從范文中汲取精華 6 多背地道的英語句子，避免漢語式英語 北京卷范文賞析
Last Monday, we were having our Chinese class
when the teacher suddenly slipped and fell. We were
all worried about her .One ofthe boys carried her on
theback,with the help of some others ,to the clicnic
immmediately.It turned out that her right leg was
broken and she had to stay in the hospital.The
followingday,we went to visit her with flowers and
fruit.Seeing her lying in bed with her leg wrapped in
bandages, we felt sorry for her and hoped that
she would recover soon.This Friday, she returned to
the class on a wheelchair to give us lessons.We were
all deeply moved
and proud of having such a
responsible teacher.
