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Topic: Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is?
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Beneath the surface usually lies the truth which may turns out to be unexpected and subversive. To those who only see one facet of an event, things invariably seem simple and single-sided. But to those who are perceivable enough to explore things underneath the surface, there is always a however.
One prime example is the America Stock Market Crash in 1929. In the dazzling twentieth, the American bull market was so financially inviting that even the American middle class poured its money into the stock market, like the New York Stock Exchange. However, on October 4, 1929, the American economy came to an abrupt halt when the New York Stock Exchange crashed. The previous widespread optimism then shifted to a desperate pessimism shading the whole nation as nightmare. Consequently, the Great Depression befell, leaving American economy crippling.
However, the American president Roosevelt insightfully staged a series of measures to save the falling economy. Just like a beam of sunlight expels the black cloud in the sky, Roosevelt brought a beam of hope to American people, saving the whole nation from the suicidal pessimism. Some may deem the Great Depression as an outright catastrophe to America. Yet beneath the bad impacts it heaved upon the country, we may find many benefits resulted. It is after the Great Depression that American people began to hold dear the value of prudence when investing in the stock market. They are more likely to avoid being overwhelmed by the seemingly sweeping optimism of current financial situations. The prophets on economy, formerly imprudent and arbitrary, are learning to be more careful and perspicacious when making predictions to the public. Thus, from this disaster, American people benefit from the financial fiasco and forged some new and beneficial habits that they previously lacked.
SAT作文修改實例
Topic: Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is?
Original
Beneath the surface usually lies the truth which may turns out to be unexpected and subversive. To those who only see one facet of an event, things invariably seem simple and single-sided. But to those who are perceivable enough to explore things underneath the surface, there is always a however.
One prime example is the America Stock Market Crash in 1929. In the dazzling twentieth, the American bull market was so financially inviting that even the American middle class poured its money into the stock market, like the New York Stock Exchange. However, on October 4, 1929, the American economy came to an abrupt halt when the New York Stock Exchange crashed. The previous widespread optimism then shifted to a desperate pessimism shading the whole nation as nightmare. Consequently, the Great Depression befell, leaving American economy crippling.
However, the American president Roosevelt insightfully staged a series of measures to save the falling economy. Just like a beam of sunlight expels the black cloud in the sky, Roosevelt brought a beam of hope to American people, saving the whole nation from the suicidal pessimism. Some may deem the Great Depression as an outright catastrophe to America. Yet beneath the bad impacts it heaved upon the country, we may find many benefits resulted. It is after the Great Depression that American people began to hold dear the value of prudence when investing in the stock market. They are more likely to avoid being overwhelmed by the seemingly sweeping optimism of current financial situations. The prophets on economy, formerly imprudent and arbitrary, are learning to be more careful and perspicacious when making predictions to the public. Thus, from this disaster, American people benefit from the financial fiasco and forged some new and beneficial habits that they previously lacked.
