大學英語六級寫作經典范文及點評（3）以個人魅力交流
Communicating a Sense of Personal Power
Communicating a sense of personal power comes from a belief that you can reach your goals in your own way. Powerful people give others power and encourage others to express themselves openly. You communicate a sense of personal power by developing these traits:
Authority
Authority is inner confidence a trust in your skills and abilities. It comes from the inside, from an attitude of I can do that. I deserve success.This attitude radiates outward as you assert your right, honestly ask for what you want and need, and develop a willingness to give to others and yourself.
Being self-assured
Self-assured behavior is active, direct, and honest. It communicates an impression of self-respect and respect for others.By being self-assured, we view our wants, needs, and rights as equal with those of others. A self-assured person wins by influencing, listening, and negotiating so that other people choose to cooperate willingly.
Accessibility
The powerful person is a master net worker. Good networking increases your visibility and gives you a valuable circle of people from whom you can give and receive support and information. Imagine yourself as the center of a wheel surrounded by spokes of contacts.
Image
You communicate power through your image. Do you project an image consistent with strong leadership①? Stand tall and walk proudly, remembering that you have value as a person. When you meet others, make direct contact and keep your handshake firm and friendly. Clearly state who you are and what you do.
Communication habits
Take a deep breath to project a firm voice. Avoid slang, and jargon, and vocal hesitations that can hinder effective communication. Use only the body movements and gestures necessary to make your point, no more. Learn how to write clearly and concisely.
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行文點評
文章是總分結構。第一段先說明發揮你的個人魅力的信念你可以用自己的方式實現自己的目標。接著作者從五個方面介紹個人魅力的通常表現，每個方面作者都指明了它對發揮個人魅力的重要性，以及如何做到這一點。
以個人魅力交流
發揮你的個人魅力來源于這樣一個信念：即你可以用自己的方式實現自己的目標。有影響力的人賦予他人力量并鼓勵他人公開表述自己的意見。發揮個人魅力通常體現在以下幾個方面：
威信
威信是內在的信心，即堅信自己的技能和能力。它來自于內心，來自于我能做好那件事、我會成功的態度。當你維護你的權利，真誠地去尋求你的所需所想，并愿意為他人和自己做出奉獻的時候，這種態度就會外露出來。
自信
自信表現為積極、直率和誠實。它表達了一種自尊和尊重他人的意愿。通過自信，我們視自己的需求和權利與他人的需要和權利是平等的。一個自信的人通過影響、傾聽與討論來贏取他人自愿的合作。
親和力
一個有影響力的人是人際交往的大師。良好的人際交往會使你為人所知，使你周圍有一個高層次的人際關系網，從他們那里你可以給予或獲得支持與信息。把你自己想象成輪軸，周圍由關系的輻條環繞。
形象
你可以通過你的形象來施加影響力。你想象過自己具有極強的領導能力的形象嗎?站直，昂首挺胸地前進，記住，作為一個人你自身具有價值。當你與他人會面時，要直接接觸，友好而有力地握手。清楚地表達你是誰，是做什么的。
交流習慣
深吸一口氣，說出堅定的話語，避免使用俚語、行話，說話不要吞吞吐吐，否則會影響有效的交流。在必要時使用身體語言和手勢，多則無益。要學會如何用筆頭清晰而簡潔地表達自己的思想感情。
詞匯斟酌
trait n. 顯著的特點, 特性
authority n. 權威, 威信, 權威人士
radiate vt. 放射, 輻射, 傳播
assert v. 斷言, 聲稱
negotiate v. 商議, 談判, 磋商,
accessibility n. 易接近, 可到達
spoke n. 輻條
slang n. 俚語
jargon n. 行話
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】be consistent with一致，相符
【臨摹】What you said now is not consistent with what you said last week. 你現在說的話與你上星期說的話不相符。
思如泉涌
As a mans heart is, so does he speak. 言為心聲。
A great talker is a great liar. 最會饒舌的人也是最會說謊的人。
Communicating a Sense of Personal Power
Communicating a sense of personal power comes from a belief that you can reach your goals in your own way. Powerful people give others power and encourage others to express themselves openly. You communicate a sense of personal power by developing these traits:
Authority
Authority is inner confidence a trust in your skills and abilities. It comes from the inside, from an attitude of I can do that. I deserve success.This attitude radiates outward as you assert your right, honestly ask for what you want and need, and develop a willingness to give to others and yourself.
Being self-assured
Self-assured behavior is active, direct, and honest. It communicates an impression of self-respect and respect for others.By being self-assured, we view our wants, needs, and rights as equal with those of others. A self-assured person wins by influencing, listening, and negotiating so that other people choose to cooperate willingly.
Accessibility
The powerful person is a master net worker. Good networking increases your visibility and gives you a valuable circle of people from whom you can give and receive support and information. Imagine yourself as the center of a wheel surrounded by spokes of contacts.
Image
You communicate power through your image. Do you project an image consistent with strong leadership①? Stand tall and walk proudly, remembering that you have value as a person. When you meet others, make direct contact and keep your handshake firm and friendly. Clearly state who you are and what you do.
Communication habits
Take a deep breath to project a firm voice. Avoid slang, and jargon, and vocal hesitations that can hinder effective communication. Use only the body movements and gestures necessary to make your point, no more. Learn how to write clearly and concisely.
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行文點評
文章是總分結構。第一段先說明發揮你的個人魅力的信念你可以用自己的方式實現自己的目標。接著作者從五個方面介紹個人魅力的通常表現，每個方面作者都指明了它對發揮個人魅力的重要性，以及如何做到這一點。
以個人魅力交流
發揮你的個人魅力來源于這樣一個信念：即你可以用自己的方式實現自己的目標。有影響力的人賦予他人力量并鼓勵他人公開表述自己的意見。發揮個人魅力通常體現在以下幾個方面：
威信
威信是內在的信心，即堅信自己的技能和能力。它來自于內心，來自于我能做好那件事、我會成功的態度。當你維護你的權利，真誠地去尋求你的所需所想，并愿意為他人和自己做出奉獻的時候，這種態度就會外露出來。
自信
自信表現為積極、直率和誠實。它表達了一種自尊和尊重他人的意愿。通過自信，我們視自己的需求和權利與他人的需要和權利是平等的。一個自信的人通過影響、傾聽與討論來贏取他人自愿的合作。
親和力
一個有影響力的人是人際交往的大師。良好的人際交往會使你為人所知，使你周圍有一個高層次的人際關系網，從他們那里你可以給予或獲得支持與信息。把你自己想象成輪軸，周圍由關系的輻條環繞。
形象
你可以通過你的形象來施加影響力。你想象過自己具有極強的領導能力的形象嗎?站直，昂首挺胸地前進，記住，作為一個人你自身具有價值。當你與他人會面時，要直接接觸，友好而有力地握手。清楚地表達你是誰，是做什么的。
交流習慣
深吸一口氣，說出堅定的話語，避免使用俚語、行話，說話不要吞吞吐吐，否則會影響有效的交流。在必要時使用身體語言和手勢，多則無益。要學會如何用筆頭清晰而簡潔地表達自己的思想感情。
詞匯斟酌
trait n. 顯著的特點, 特性
authority n. 權威, 威信, 權威人士
radiate vt. 放射, 輻射, 傳播
assert v. 斷言, 聲稱
negotiate v. 商議, 談判, 磋商,
accessibility n. 易接近, 可到達
spoke n. 輻條
slang n. 俚語
jargon n. 行話
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】be consistent with一致，相符
【臨摹】What you said now is not consistent with what you said last week. 你現在說的話與你上星期說的話不相符。
思如泉涌
As a mans heart is, so does he speak. 言為心聲。
A great talker is a great liar. 最會饒舌的人也是最會說謊的人。
